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WMD Blog Assignment Response- Avril H.

What data do you already track about yourself, or have you tracked in the past but no longer pay attention to? Why have you made these choices? What do you get out of it? What are the advantages/disadvantages of self-tracking? Of using digital devices to help us do it? What patterns do you think are present in your life, but don’t have the data to back it up? (For example, the person who found that coffee actually hurts his concentration, or the person who found that watching a bad movie made him feel negative about his own film career).

People in the 21st century rely heavily on tracking themselves, whether it is to manage their finances, know how they are sleeping, or simply to inform themselves how active they are being every day; it has become a way of life for many. Back in 2017, I began to track how many steps I walked a day; I wanted to have data of the amount of light exercise I had done for the day. I have always been self-conscious towards the way I appear to other people. I tend to feel ashamed of my weight, the scars on my face, and anything that comes out of my mouth. For this reason, I have tried many diets such as KETO, Atkins, the Military diet, and Weight Watchers. I also resorted to dietary supplements and shakes, which led me to get sick for awhile. I wanted to lose weight and meet society’s expectations of me as a woman no matter what the consequences were. To make sure my goals were going to be met, I looked for applications on my phone that allowed me to track calories and water intake, and any exercises executed that day. Even though, it can be great to know the way your life its going and if your goals are being met; there are many negatives in constantly keeping tab on certain aspects of one’s life.

Self-tracking permits you to collect evidence and analyze it to understand what you should or should not stop doing in order to reach certain goals in your life. My goals were staying active enough to lose weight, and not go over an amount of calories. Tracking myself helped me do this (to a certain point). On the other hand, self-tracking caused me a lot of unnecessary anxiety (on top of my every day episodes due to my disorder), and when I did not reach the results I was looking for, it caused me to feel down, dare I say depressed. I became a slave of the numbers because I wanted to look and feel a specific way, but the end-goals were not to satisfied myself.

A pattern that I believe exists in my life but I do not have the data to back it up is migraines (frequency and why). I feel like I get migraines more often when I am stressed out, or anxious towards certain things. I could begin to write down a list of the times I get a headache but this would turn into something obsessive and the activity itself would probably give me a migraine. In conclusion, self-tracking can be beneficial depending on its use, but for me it was not due to the goals I wanted to meet and the steps I took.

 

If you took the SAT or ACT, did you opt to let the company share your scores with schools? What did you gain from that decision, and how do you feel about it in light of the article? How does the College Board (the company behind the SAT)’s business model intersect with what you learned about college rankings? How should standardized tests be used in college admissions (or, should they be used at all)? What do SAT scores and the methods by which they are measured reveal about students, and what do they hide?

I took the SAT’s twice because I believed my first score was not enough to get accepted into the school I wanted. The second time I only improved by 100-200 points (it is something), and I did get accepted into all 15 colleges/universities I applied to. I still wonder if I would not have taken the test again if I would have received all those acceptance letters. I did opt to let College Board share my scores with schools. Many colleges and universities contacted me (and still do, in spite of me being enrolled in John Jay) to know if I was interested in scheduling tours or attending their institution in the long run. After reading the article, I feel disturbed. A huge percentage of colleges buy our SAT scores to lower their acceptance rate, but this is done at our cost! We apply to these institutions with hope that we will get accepted, making plans of what we will do when we step in their campus. But, every member of the admission committee already knows that we will not make it to final candidates.  I have always believe that SAT’s are not a good way to measure if a student should be admitted in college. Many students get anxious when it comes to taking a test, no matter how hard they study, it is just the way they are. These institutions should focus in analyzing how future students are in interviews, in their community or in other aspects of their everyday life. These kind of tests do not show your actual intellectual ability and your interests in life.

WMD Blog Assignment Response- Marissa Sciascia

What data do you already track about yourself, or have you tracked in the past but no longer pay attention to? Why have you made these choices? What do you get out of it? What are the advantages/disadvantages of self-tracking? Of using digital devices to help us do it? What patterns do you think are present in your life, but don’t have the data to back it up? (For example, the person who found that coffee actually hurts his concentration, or the person who found that watching a bad movie made him feel negative about his own film career). 

Data that I track about myself on a routine basis relates to my exercise habits. I am an avid runner, and I track various aspects of this activity. This includes everything from the date and time of my run, the length of my run (measured in miles and in time), my average pace for each mile, and my heart rate. The device that aids me in easily tracking these factors is my FitBit. I have an application on my cellphone that pairs with the device to log all of this data. I track this data for several reasons, one of the main reasons being my participation in multiple 5k’s and running fundraisers throughout the year. I like to feel prepared when participating in these events, and by tracking my running data I give myself the ease of mind knowing that I can conquer the event without feeling like my lungs are collapsing or without fear of failure. It helps me make adjustments to things such as my breathing techniques or my stride, so I can improve my run times and my stamina throughout each run. 

I also track this data because it undoubtedly gives me a feeling of self-accomplishment. Not many people wake up at three thirty in the morning and roll out of bed and say “Yes, I am so stoked to go run three miles before work!”. I am that special kind of crazy; but this feeling is not exclusive to every morning of my life. Tracking my runs and being able to reflect back on the data makes me feel like I am superwoman, and if I can make it through my morning run, any challenge that I may face throughout the remainder of my day pales in comparison. It is a psychological boost. It gives me mental clarity, and wipes away my stresses.  

Of course, as with anything, there are some disadvantages to tracking this information. On days when I am not feeling 100% and I struggle to keep my average pace, or I cannot run as far as I normally would, I look back at the data and tend to feel defeated. While this happens less and less (as I learn to not be so hard on myself!), it still does occur. I have noticed that on select days when I have a “shitty” run, my attitude for the rest of the day is definitely compromised. This is a pattern that I know is present in my life, but I do not necessarily have any data to back it up. I suppose I could start tracking my moods on a regular basis via a journal of some sort, and examine the correlation between my mood and how “successful” my run for the day was.  It would be interesting to have the data to prove my theory. Overall, I do believe that tracking this activity is more beneficial for me than it does harm me. Running is a therapy tool in my life, and I do enjoy watching my progress and feeling a sense of accomplishment.  

If you took the SAT or ACT, did you opt to let the company share your scores with schools? What did you gain from that decision, and how do you feel about it in light of the article? How does the College Board (the company behind the SAT)’s business model intersect with what you learned about college rankings? How should standardized tests be used in college admissions (or, should they be used at all)? What do SAT scores and the methods by which they are measured reveal about students, and what do they hide? 

I took the SAT examination multiple times throughout my high school career; five times to be specific. I took this exam so many times out of fear that I would be rejected from colleges if I did not have a high enough score. I felt there was always room for improvement. Each time, I did opt to let the company share my scores with schools. However, I mostly did this out of ignorance. I was not really sure what schools would do with this data, nor did I really care at the time. After reading the article and learning about what colleges do with this data, I can sincerely say I am appalled. Who benefits from the purchase of students test scores? This is certainly not done for the greater good of the students. College applications are expensive and time consuming. It is a waste of time and energy to have students apply to colleges that they never stood a chance of getting into in the first place, in order for “prestigious” colleges to maintain low acceptance rates. Are these colleges really all that prestigious if they purposely solicit applicants that were never qualified in the first place just so they can reject them? 

Additionally, I do not believe that standardized testing should be utilized to measure a student’s worth or gauge how successful they will be in their future endeavors. Furthermore, there have been plenty of successful people in modern times that do not even possess a college education! According to the article “15 Super Successful People Who Never Graduated College” from money.com, Ellen Degeneres whose net worth is approximately $400 million, and Steve Jobs, whose net worth at the time of his death was $10.2 billion, are among the chart toppers of college drop outs. I’m sure nobody stopped to ask what the hell their SAT scores were. A test cannot measure how successful a person will be. Colleges should be spending more time interviewing prospective students, rather than studying their test scores. 

Weapons of Math Destruction Blog Assignment

This assignment is due on Monday, February 17 by the end of the day. 

You Can Earn: Up to 2 points of participation credit for posting, and up to 2 more for thoughtfully responding to your classmates in the comments.

First, for those having trouble accessing the Wall Street Journal article on the SAT, you can sign up for a FREE Wall Street Journal account by following the directions here: https://www1.cuny.edu/sites/cunyufs/2018/03/09/wall-street-journal-access-for-cuny-faculty-and-students/

Just make sure you use your John Jay email address!

If you have trouble accessing the New York Times article about data collection, you can sign up for an account on the site also for FREE using your John Jay email.

Overall Instructions:

After reading all of the chapters/articles for Monday 2/10 and Wednesday 2/12, write and publish a blog post responding to 1.5 of the following prompts (your choice). When you are done writing, make sure to choose the “Student Posts” category in the righthand sidebar.

What does “respond to 1.5 of the prompts mean?”

It means I want you to do an in-depth response to one prompt, where you really do some research and think critically about the issues, and then also write a quicker/shorter answer to another prompt.

Prompts

  1. What data do you already track about yourself, or have you tracked in the past but no longer pay attention to? Why have you made these choices? What do you get out of it? What are the advantages/disadvantages of self-tracking? Of using digital devices to help us do it? What patterns do you think are present in your life, but don’t have the data to back it up? (For example, the person who found that coffee actually hurts his concentration, or the person who found that watching a bad movie made him feel negative about his own film career).
  2. Look up John Jay on the U.S. News and World Report, as well as any other colleges you may have applied to (and/or attended in the past, if you are a transfer student). What kind of picture does it paint of John Jay? Is that image accurate to your own experience so far? What information were you able to access, and what were you not able to access? Do the rankings/methodology seem fair? Why or why not? What would you change if you were in charge of the ranking algorithm, and why? What additional questions do you have about
  3. If you took the SAT or ACT, did you opt to let the company share your scores with schools? What did you gain from that decision, and how do you feel about it in light of the article? How does the College Board (the company behind the SAT)’s business model intersect with what you learned about college rankings? How should standardized tests be used in college admissions (or, should they be used at all)? What do SAT scores and the methods by which they are measured reveal about students, and what do they hide?

Instructions for Responding

A good response does more than simply agree/disagree with or compliment your classmate. You should ADD to their analysis in some way, or POSE ADDITIONAL QUESTIONS for them to think about based on their answer. You can also CONTRIBUTE YOUR OWN THOUGHTS as long as you’re not simply repeating what you wrote about in your own post.

If your response could be one of these discussion board memes, please spend some more time thinking about it and try again.

 

Optional: Grammar Lesson with Trump and the New Hampshire Primaries

Hi Everybody,

I’m watching the news coverage of the New Hampshire Democratic primary results, partially to pay attention to politics and partially to look for interesting examples to talk about with all of you. (One thing that’s very interesting is how different the coverage is across different newspapers/channels! Fox News is known for being particularly conservative and MSNBC is known for being particularly liberal, but I feel like most other channels don’t have as much of a reputation toward one political direction, so noticing differences in coverage of one event can be a useful way of trying to figure out political bias. But that’s not what I wanted to share in this post.)

One news site I’m watching (The Guardian) just shared a screenshot of one of Trump’s tweets about the primaries, embedded below:

Whatever your opinion on the content is, let’s look at some of the phrasing choices he made, and see some rhetorical grammar in action!

The first thing I noticed is the use of passive voice:

sometimes referred to as Pocahontas.”

Even though we know that Trump is the one who regularly refers to Elizabeth Warren that way, the passive voice hides the “do-er” of the verb. It doesn’t make a particular claim about who refers to her that way. The implied “do-er,” because it is unspecified, becomes “some people” instead of “Trump.” (Of course, Trump is not the only one who does it, but he is the one who started it/who others picked it up from.)   This makes the Namecalling (also rhetorical!) seem more widespread and accepted/agreed with.

I think this is effective for his rhetorical goals: to be popular as a president and have people agree with, or at least accept, him, and reject his political rivals.

The other thing I noticed is the quotation marks:

“Calling for unity is her way of getting there, going home, and having a “nice cold beer” with her husband!”

Normally, quotation marks used in this way would make me think he is using this phrase as a euphemism, maybe referring to something offensive. But in this case, I can’t figure out what it is. “Nice cold beer” is not a known sexual innuendo as far as I know, and I don’t think it stands for anything else? My other thought is that maybe she has used the phrase “nice cold beer” in her campaigning or interviews before, so the quotation marks show he is referring back to her own words. But I have no idea if that’s true– I’m just guessing.

So, I do not think these quotation marks are rhetorically effective, because even if they are grammatically correct (and whether or not they are would depend on what he is intending to say), the intended meaning is not clear.

Paper 1: “This I No Longer Believe” Creative Nonfiction

These are the same as the instructions/rubric I passed out in class on Monday, posting here for anyone who was absent or has lost their copy. To download as a Word Doc, click here.

Paper 1: This I No Longer Believe

Partial Draft Due: 2/19 (Wednesday)
Full Draft Due: 2/26 (Wednesday)
F
inal Draft Due: 3/4 (Wednesday)

General Instructions:

For your first paper, you will write a piece of persuasive creative nonfiction (at least 4 pages) about one of your own beliefs. The “This I Believe” essay is a common genre for ENG 101 students to read and write. However, I am asking you to write about a belief that you no longer have, or a belief that has changed significantly over time. Your paper should tell the story of how you came to hold your original belief and then what made you change your belief and why.

In your paper, you should:

  • Choose any English dialect you wish to write in (Standard American Academic English [SAAE], informal General American, AAVE, Spanglish, or any other dialect)
  • Use a consistent authorial voice throughout your paper (tone, style, etc.)
  • Provide rough translations of any non-English or slang words your monolingual professor might not understand (remember your audience!) (This can be done using footnotes, parentheses or another method)
  • Provide vivid sensory description of your experiences that enables the reader to picture the events in their mind’s eye (and mind’s ear, tongue, skin, nose, etc.)
  • Leave the reader with a clear sense of what you no longer believe and why
  • Articulate your logical reasons for changing your belief AND the personal events that led to your change in belief
  • Make your first attempt at APA formatting (title page, headers)
  • Use correct punctuation, capitalization, and spelling for your chosen dialect. When in doubt, use SAAE rules.

Examples:

Students in the past have written about changes in political beliefs (marijuana legalization, the death penalty, capitalism), changes in beliefs about personal relationships (when to trust, the nature of love, at what age it’s appropriate to date and/or be sexually active), changes in beliefs about themselves and their place in society (learning to love themselves in spite of internalized racism), beliefs about the universe (becoming religious, becoming not-religious, changing religious beliefs even though staying religious) and many more.

What does “personal and logical reasons” mean? For example, I didn’t know a lot about immigration-related issues until I had to research them for my high school debate team. For “logical reasons,” I would describe the information I found through my research. For personal reasons, I would tell the story of how I found that information, how I reacted to it emotionally, and the specific impacts it had on my worldview.

Creative Nonfiction Rubric (100 points)

1. Turned in (3) drafts on time and participated in (2) peer review days (25 points)

2. Takes the reader on a narrative journey that enables them to understand the previous belief, the current belief, the reasons the belief changed, and how that change in belief came about. (10 points) 

3. Maintains a consistent authorial voice throughout the paper with regard to chosen dialect, tone, and style. The essay has an internal logic and deviations from the chosen dialect, tone, style, etc. have a clear literary or rhetorical purpose. (10 points) 

4. Fits the genre of persuasive creative nonfiction/meets guidelines (25 points)

  • Paper develops a story over time (the story may or may not be told in a linear fashion)
  • Paper uses relevant and vivid sensory description and/or literary devices to convey feelings, events, thoughts, and/or experiences so that the reader not only understands the feelings/events/thoughts intellectually but also experiences them along with the author in their mind’s eye
  • Paper leaves the reader with a clear sense of the belief’s significance in the writer’s life or some other intended meaning
  • Paper is at least 4 full pages long

5. Supports and explains the change in belief using both the logical train of thought that leads them to hold the new belief AND the personal events/reasons that led them to that change in belief. When logical evidence is included, the author also describes how that evidence impacted them personally. (20 points)

6. Uses correct capitalization, punctuation, and spelling for the chosen dialect and cites evidence as needed. The writer made their best attempt at APA formatting (title page, header, citations if appropriate). (10 points)

Sign Up for Peer Review Options

In class yesterday, we discussed how we would like to conduct peer review, and I said I would make a survey for people to sign up for which option they prefer. We decided on 3 options:

  1. Writers bring paper copies of their drafts and exchange them for feedback during the peer review session
  2. Olivia posts anonymized copies of drafts to the course site, labeled (Paper 1, Paper 2, etc.). Writers are assigned random numbers and leave comments on the papers corresponding with that number.
  3. If a writer would like to keep their paper private, they can choose to do so, Olivia will send them feedback, and they will leave feedback for their peers using the online method.

One thing we did not discuss (or I don’t remember what we decided): whether the in-person peer review should also be anonymized. In the past, I have put people in groups of 3 and each person reads/comments on the writing of the other people in their group. So, I put two options on the survey regarding this.

Please select whichever option you prefer by Monday night so I can spend Tuesday getting everything organized.

Welcome to your survey for Peer Review Paper 1

How would you like your paper to be peer reviewed? (If you choose paper copy or online, you will give feedback to others who chose the same. If you choose to keep your paper private, you will give feedback to others online.)

Optional: Academic Structure with Informal Style

Adding on to our discussion from last week about academic writing, here is an optional reading that uses academic structure with an informal writing style. Even though Dr. Young writes in a “conversational” way, this is still considered “scholarly” and was published in an academic journal, because he is still engaging in academic work even though he uses slang, etc.

I may have us do an activity with it later in the semester, but for now, just read/skim if you’re interested.

If you would rather download the file instead of reading in the embedder window, click here.

Rhetorical Device: Persuade

The ad is making the argument that “AptDeco is the easiest way to buy & sell furniture”. The intended audience is people who want to buy or sell pre-owned items. They are using the following strategies to convince the audience: free to list, free pick-up, no home visits, faster sold (in 6 days), and customer reviews.
The data presented is not reliable. How did they conclude that it is the easiest way to sell or buy items? What statistic did they use to bring that conclusion? Where can I find the customers’ reviews? Who is Emma S.? I think the ad is not effective because they do not use facts, real furniture, and real numbers to persuade the audience.

Nancy Pelosi and Donald Trump’s Bickering

On February 4, 2020, Donald Trump was scheduled to delivered his State of the Union speech in Washington D.C, where Nancy Pelosi and Vice President Pence, and many politicians were present. Mr.Trump entered the room and approached Pence and Pelosi before giving his speech to provide them with a copy of his speech, during this moment Pelosi extended her hand out to Mr.Trump for a handshake, but Trump turned around without giving mind. After President trump finished delivering his speech everybody rose up and clap, yet Nancy Pelosi decided to ripped his speech apart, when asked about it, she responded “it was a manifesto of lies”.

http://https://www.cnn.com/videos/politics/2020/02/05/trump-state-of-the-union-2020-pelosi-tearing-paper-vpx.cnn

By: Chelsea & Avril